Is Derivative A Bad Thing?

Time for more pages. We're moving along pretty quick.

Here's the last page from the previous post that was giving me some issues. If you've already read it feel free to skip to the new pages found below

The new pages

 

 

 

Next time: yep, more pages.

Let me know what you think in the comments. Any thoughts or suggestions on how to improve the script will really help when I start rewriting. I can just come back and see your feedback. Thanks!